IELTS 2-part question Essay: Loss of biodiversity

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IELTS 2-part question Essay: Loss of biodiversity

 

The influence of human beings on the world’s ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio-diversity? What solutions can you suggest?

 

Пишем эссе в четыре шага:

Шаг 1️⃣: после перефразированная формулируем мнение + аргумент почему вы занимаете эту позицию + отвечаем на 2-й вопрос (решение, причина, фактор):

On no account should the harmful influence of human activities on biological diversity be ignored. Firstly, this essay will discuss the main issue connected to dying out of some animals and plants which is anthropogenic pollution. Secondly, it will analyze recycling as the most effective measure to improve the current state of affairs.

 

Шаг 2️⃣: поясняем первый аргумент + пример:

The pollution caused by human activity is commonly believed to be the principal reason why a variety of biological forms considerably declined. This is because, domestic waste, particularly the plastic one, has a detrimental influence on the whole nature, since certain animals are used to eating not only edible products, but they also could swallow indecomposable refuse. As a result, if it were not for plastic waste in the oceans, a huge number of maritime animals would not die. For instance, having carried out alarming research, scientists have discovered that even thirty plastic bags could make whales meet their death in agony.

 

Шаг:3️⃣ поясняем второй аргумент +пример:

The best solution for this worrying problem would be the recycling which aids to minimize the consumption of materials required for new production. For this reason, energy usage, air, and water pollution would be considerably reduced in the long run provided that raw materials were reused. Therefore, it is high time the governments took action to motivate people to classify their wastes for recycling since the battle against pollution will be lost without the conscious assistance of individuals. For example, recently it has been revealed that repeated usage of plastic helps to reduce energy consumption to produce new bottles by 87% and prevents waste from throwing out.

 

Шаг 4️⃣: дублируем мнение в заключении + суммируем оба аргумента:

In conclusion, one of the main problems connected with anthropogenic pollution is losing biological diversity and this can be solved through the recycling of materials.

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Grammar errors: 2

Vocabulary inaccuracies:1

Advanced Grammar Structures: 6

Less commonly used vocabulary: 11

Approximate Band 7.0

Task Achievement 7.0

Coherence and Cohesion 7.0

Lexical Resource 7.5

Grammatical Range and Accuracy 7.0



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